Thursday, February 17, 2011

Last chance for learning to use detail your writing. Detail: character's names, setting names, specific actions, names of things and ideas used in the literature. You can't just retell a story because you're developing a topic, one you've introduced in your topic sentence. But, the detail will support and show your topic so that they reader can see. Write like the reader hasn't read the literature like you have. Finally, remember to come out of the detail and come back to your topic, summarizing it.

I realize this is the first time you're trying this for a grade, but try it. I'm betting we'll do it again and you'll have a chance to improve.

Do note: I tell you on the sheet exactly how I'm going to be grading the paragraph. Pay attention to it.


...of the third set, second time 'round.

First, look at what Darren handed in to me: the full steps to doing one of these poems, a listiing poem. He would have only gotten this by using my directions. Wow!The poem he came up with is terrific.
Once he's got it with one close to mine, about his pet, he can try to get more creative. This is exactly what I want to see!
Remember, poems of lists are not necessarily one word lines, but a list instead of ideas that were then turned into a poem. We didn't start with a sentence, but a list.
That step, taking the list and turning it into a poem with caps where needed, terms and proofreading, is a must.

For the final set, work on more than one word lines, finding errors and painting a picture with your words.

Thanks for the efforts I see here!

Wednesday, February 16, 2011


...from Friday. Favorite comic? The Facebook one. But, the one beside it is great too!
But, Terrible Tone, Setting Man and Mona Lisa were good too.

Point of View and Action Woman are worth a mention also.

And, finally, some of you did a fine job with putting vocab words in.

You can find this site online and do lots with it, even move the character around. Enjoy being creative!

Tuesday, February 15, 2011

Essay 7

... and the good writing it produced. (Some aren't on here because they're headed to the BOCES contest.)On here are some examples of good writing. Some have been working hard and writing well all year. Some are becoming better and better as the year goes on. I so appreciate both.
What I don't appreciate are the number of students who aren't putting much (or any!) effort into my class. It can be disheartening. But, the key for me is to concentrate on the ones who are working.
People who try normally benefit from their trying. Good. It's how life should be....and is!

Thursday, February 10, 2011


of lists.
We started a new format this week. We've left dividing and editing sentences into poetry and moved onto lists. Brainstorming. Coming up with lots of ideas. Then, culling, organizing, adding to the ideas, adding in terms, figuring out capitals, stanzas and punctuation, and finally, adding in a title.
It's a new way to write your poems. But, look at what some of you did!! I am sooooooooooo amazed, impressed and in awe. It makes me think, "Could I have ever done this for a teacher?!?!?" It makes me say, "Thank you!" to all of you who try. And, for those of you who don't do, shame on you. It's your education you're wasting.

Another one due next Wednesday. That's the cool thing about life: there's always tomorrow to try again, to do again, to do.

So, do it!

Details's all about the details when writing.

Stuffy Pete, the Old Gentleman, the park.

Thanksgiving, tradition.

A mansion, a feast, two old ladies and their ...tradition.

9 years, a dinner and a tradition.

What should he have done?

Give your answer.

Set the scene. Develop it.

Develop it with details from the story. Build your case.

Details from the story. Back up your opinion with details, details, details. Good thinking is a great place to start, but then good thinkers who are good writers find the detail to show.

Next week's is for a grade.